Dissecting THE MARTIAN

By Elissa Field  |  August 26, 2017  | 

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A storm just whipped up on a planet far enough from home it’s taken you months just to arrive. In those moments on the red planet, your captain declares the winds unsafe and orders evacuation, but an errant communication tower spears you through. Out of reach for rescue, assumed to be dying, you are abandoned with no hope of rescue, and no plan for sustainability, alone on Mars. What word comes to mind?

The opening line of Andy Weir’s The Martian sums up, in four words of spicy vernacular, not only the life and death stakes for survival, but the fan-winning wit of Weir’s protagonist, Mark Watney. As a novel that began its life self-published on the author’s blog site, and went on to win a 6-figure publishing contract, a Hugo award for the author, and 7 Oscar nominations for the film, The Martian was a lively choice for the third Breakout Novelist Book Dissection for 2017.

As readers may know from prior posts by John Kelley (Dissecting The Goldfinch) and Natalie Hart (Dissecting A Man Called Ove), WU hosts a Breakout Novelist Book Dissection group which meets four times a year to closely examine what led certain novels to become breakout successes. Discussions take place over 7 days, guided by questions derived from Donald Maass’s Writing the Breakout Novel.

The Martian as a breakout example

Members of the Breakout Novel Dissection group nominate the books we dissect, based on a few criteria – primarily that the book be “a true breakout,” not one whose success depended on the author’s prior success, and which broke out beyond the normal expectations of its genre.

It’s hard to find a more compelling breakout story than The Martian. When Weir’s novel sold film and publication rights in 2013, he said he had given up any such expectation. In fact, the novel first ‘broke out’ on his own website. Having been unsuccessful in finding an agent, he began posting the novel as a series on his blog in 2011. Interest for a publication contract appeared after he sold 35,000 copies of a Kindle edition in just a few months. Beyond expectations, indeed.

And it’s also a compelling example for being science fiction that broke outside its borders of expected readership. In prior dissections, we’ve discussed genre transcendency as an aspect of breakout fiction. For example, we saw how Station Eleven wove literary fiction with science fiction for breakout effect.

But The Martian… is hard science. Real, dense facts. There’s actual math in there. Weir is the son of a particle physicist; he studied orbital mechanics and space flight. Actual scientists have given thumbs-up to the engineering, environment, trajectories, and equipment Weir imagined for his Mars mission.

How did hard science fiction break out to such mass market appeal? For those who haven’t followed or participated in a breakout dissection before, this is exactly the question we are asking: Why this book? What did the author do to create such a breakout success?

Heads up: If you haven’t read the novel, know that SPOILERS MAY BE PRESENT in shared excerpts from our dissection.

High Stakes: What is the value of a human life?

In Writing the Breakout Novel, Donald Maass suggests that “deep personal stakes dig down so far that they show us who we are.” He says, “High stakes start with high human worth.” That concept of human worth is at the heart of Weir’s Martian.

Dissectors readily agreed that this book was all about high stakes. In the opening four words and ensuing paragraphs, we learn that Mark Watney was abandoned on Mars when his crew members had no choice but to leave him in the face of a sudden storm, believing an accident had left him dead. With no way home, no communication with Earth, limited resources, and no immediate chance for rescue, the main character – in his audacious vernacular – declares he expects he’ll die.

You can’t open with much higher stakes than awareness of imminent death.

While Watney accepts that death is inevitable, he begins working the science, continually ratcheting up the stakes with each success or failure. Dissection discussions revealed the ways Watney’s success in sustaining his life, with the prospect of actual survival, raised the stakes with continually ratcheting tension. Each experiment has the potential to extend his life long enough that there is the possibility of rescue, or to fatally end his options. One of the more endearing themes that dissectors felt led to breakout effect was Watney’s persisting hope.

Dissector Priya Gill observed: “[Vitality] is almost the theme. Watney was not just content to stay alive as long as he could, but was focused on furthering science and finding a way back home. That to me was so endearing.”

When Watney restores communication with Earth and his NASA peers find out he alive, stakes take a turn. Our dissection discussion began to hinge on Maass’s point about human worth. Dissectors reflected on Weir’s choice to switch pov, at the point. Dissectors agreed that the added point of view created a layered complexity to what could have been a more plain survival story. Instead, Weir reveals the actions, thoughts and debate of those on Earth.

Dissection members discussed how each character’s viewpoint added layers of tension to the newly inserted moral dilemma. If NASA could go save Watney, should they? Both the theme and rising action become dependent on the underlying question for a mission in space: is one man’s life worth risking the lives of others? It was clear that insertion of this higher-stakes theme, questioning the value of one life, elevated the overall breakout effect.

Setting: No big deal… It’s just set on Mars

Every novelist brings certain strengths, and one of author Weir’s is the depth to which he researched and plotted the actual science of Mark Watney’s mission on Mars. Maass’s advice for breakout settings speaks to the authenticity and immersion that comes from richly detailed setting – Weir brings his A game with this in The Martian.

For all you kids who sat bleary eyed through science or math classes in school, Weir blows most readers away with his ability to accurately depict the Hab, the environment, available resources, ability to transform technology for new purposes, etc., for surviving on Mars. It’s tempting to think that might lose some readers, but Weir has managed to hook both non-science fiction readers as well as those who are well-versed in real science and expectations within the hard science genre. Dissectors suggested that Weir’s adept voice kept readers turning pages.

Among our dissectors, we had a handful who read or write science fiction, or work in scientific fields. And we had those who prefaced comments, “I don’t usually read science fiction…” Dissectors shared insights to understand how a writer can go that deep into such specific processes, and how readers — even those without an innate interest in the technicalities — come to trust the writer, believing in the story’s authenticity. This is one of the enriching experiences as we read a range of genre — we learn so much from each other’s perspectives.

Natalie Hart observed: “Weir did this in spades. Everything about the setting (at least in Mars) was highly specific, from the atmosphere of Mars to the Hab to the vehicles, and it all required struggle and continual negotiation to merely survive, so we were constantly faced with the various settings. And how we experienced it was highly specific, through Watney’s descriptions of how he’s forced to change and adapt, and through Watney’s mostly can-do, fix-it personality. This was a major strength of this book.”

Christopher Blake said: “The author clearly did a lot of research on the climate and topography of Mars and it shows. Mark notes the precautions he must take to survive in the intemperate climate. The reader can experience this second hand through his description of the setting. The details of the setting lend an authenticity to the story.”

Priya Gill, one of our members with a background in science, shared: “Wier used the setting beautifully, as an antagonist and also as the only place in the universe where this story could realistically happen” based on “the distance between Earth and Mars, and the inhabitability and lack thereof… this story could not happen in Jupiter or Venus.”

A breakout characteristic is for setting to not only create a visual but to create textural layers building character, emotion, and plot tensions.

Priya continued: “I felt that the ‘personality’ of Mars suits the personality of Watney so well.” Of specific settings, including The Hab, the Ares 3 spacecraft, and scenes back at NASA headquarters, she added: “It is interesting that each setting has its own personality and culture and, as we read, it is evident at any time exactly where we are.”

In reviews, The Martian was sometimes billed as ‘a Robinson Crusoe story set on Mars.’ In that classic survival-story sense, our members dissected the ways that Weir used setting as a key element in building the novel’s page-turning suspense – notable as a source of its success.

Character & Voice: What we found most memorable… or lacking

We look for breakout characteristics of a character with a vivid inner journey (as well as their external conflict), textured with layers that build some larger-than-life quality. One of Weir’s challenges is that he has one man alone on a planet. How do you get him talking, to reveal insights or create tension?

As we discussed objects, symbols, and other aspects of setting, we observed the effectiveness of Weir’s framework, to have Watney narrating daily science log entries. These serve as windows into each “sol,” and suggest unspoken tension when there are gaps between sols. The sols reveal the rising action of Watney’s increasing strategies to first extend how many days he’ll survive, and then begin to envision the prospect of escape. The posts build continual microtension and suspense of his external conflict for survival.

Most of our readers found Watney’s endearing, deadpan and irreverent voice one of the novel’s strongest qualities. Weir wrote a character who you could hear speaking in your head. Often, he swore. But it’s Mars, he’s dying. You get that’s fair enough.

Weir often accomplishes the humor in contrasts: ending one log with a prediction of success (or failure), and the next log opens with the stark opposite. To keep his sanity, he seeks out the entertainment left behind by his teammates. His logs are then punctuated by reactions to scenes from their recordings of Three’s Company and disco music.

Once Watney makes contact with NASA back on Earth, we hear from a variety of players whose voices expose that high stakes theme as they debate whether it is feasible or ethically essential to return to Mars to rescue Watney.

Jocosa Wade observed how these voices create secondary or contradictory emotions, elevating the effect: “[Watney’s] use of humor and his optimism was in direct opposition to the people at NASA who were all ‘pressured up’ about saving Watney, their own asses, the space program etc. I think It was the juxtaposition of emotions between Watney and NASA that ratcheted up the tension of the book overall.”

For many of us, one of the greatest learning experiences during dissections is not just observing breakout elements that are present, but in wrestling with ones that seem missing. This held true with The Martian. As much as most members cited Watney’s endearing voice as a strength, many felt him lacking in the kind of inner conflict we so often find at the heart of breakout characters.

We get glimmers of his relationship with his mission team prior to being stranded. Rarely, he mentions a detail from earth. But we know very little about his personal backstory, or his motivation beyond science, the mission, or survival. This was an interesting discussion, as members wavered on whether they felt something was lacking, or if it was part of the novel’s overall effect.

For example, one could argue that subtle layers of Watney’s inner conflict are revealed by his deep desire to achieve and document continued scientific research, to further the mission, even when he assumes he will soon die.

In some cases, we discussed how a deep inner life is not inherent to some genre. Jan O’hara noted: “My tendency is to want more [characterization], as well,” but she cited experience with as a beta-reader for a friend who writes military thrillers. “I kept prompting him to add internal dialogue, etc., to his writing. They were the first passages his editor struck as being contrary to reader expectations, and resulting in a slower pace. In that sense, Weir did an excellent job, IMHO, of meeting his core readers’ expectations.”

Takeaway: we learn most from books that raise questions

Ending with that thought, it is interesting how often that participants comment after a Breakout Novel Dissection about how much they learned — and often, that they learned more when they disagreed with (or at least puzzled over) an author’s choice. Especially when novel selections might be from a genre one does not always read, we find ourselves challenged in ways that increase our insights as readers and deepen our thoughts about our own writing.

What are your thoughts? If you read The Martian, what elements of Weir’s work did you feel led to its standout success? Are you someone who ‘never reads science fiction’ but was drawn in to this one? For those who are avid readers (or writers) of science fiction, how did this compare to others works? Even if you didn’t read this novel, do some of our dissection observations resonate with your own works in progress? Please share your thoughts below, and see if we can gain further insights together.

Dissection group members have selected Carol Rifka Brunt’s debut novel, Tell the Wolves I’m Home, for our next discussion series, starting October 26th. If the Breakout Novel Dissection group interests you, we’d love to have you join us on Facebook!

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19 Comments

  1. John J Kelley on August 26, 2017 at 9:22 am

    Great summary, Elissa! And welcome to WU!

    I was one of the dissectors in this instance expressing how I don’t often read science fiction but found myself drawn to Watney’s predicament. As you described, for me it was the immediacy of his situation and how readily his fully formed personality was displayed in his narrative.

    Even so, I might well have lost interest had it not been for the opening up of the story to include the characters and drama taking place back on earth with regard to his rescue. It was one of the best examples I’ve seen recently of a story expanding in just the right way from a narrower perspective.



    • Elissa Field on August 26, 2017 at 10:12 am

      Thanks, John. It’s interesting what you’re saying about the timing of that shift in pov. It really did expand it into a more universal story



  2. David Wilson on August 26, 2017 at 9:49 am

    I thought Mark Watney’s humor is what sold the book. Without that it would have been just another survival story. I listened to the audiobook, narrated by R.C. Bray, and the humor really came through in the narration. My favorite part of the book was when he created a new unit of measurement, the “Pirate-Ninja”. instead of using the long standard name. He mentions that its his log and he can do what he wants.

    I usually read sci-fi and this a fine specimen of the genre. The best Sci-fi reflects on the human condition under some pressure, whether it be Aliens, Space Travel, or some rampant virus. The Martian certainly fits in.



    • Elissa Field on August 26, 2017 at 10:09 am

      David, I’d forgotten about that unit of measure. I agree about the humor. He won me over, early on, with ones like this:

      I suppose I’ll think of something. Or die.
      Anyway, much more important: I simply can’t abide the replacement of Chrissy with Cindy. Three’s Company may never be the same after this fiasco. Time will tell.

      Thanks for sharing your insights, as one who reads the genre.



  3. Karen Duvall on August 26, 2017 at 10:30 am

    I read just about all genres and read according to my moods. I read less SF these days, but two of my favorite SF authors are Greg Bear and Bruce Sterling. Now I want to read Holy Fire again. :)

    I really enjoyed The Martian for all the reasons pointed out in this dissection. I did struggle to “see” the Hab in my mind’s eye only because I had no point of reference, but that was a minimal detraction. Once I watched the movie it all made sense. I still haven’t decided which ending I liked better; the one in the book, or the movie? I lean toward the movie ending.

    I plan to read future books by Weir. He’s an author on my watch list.



    • Elissa Field on August 26, 2017 at 12:06 pm

      Karen & David both raise interesting points, which came up in our dissection as well — considering all the formats you can “read” a book in, how does that lend impact to the story? David mentions that the audiobook narrator, R.C. Bray, really brought the humor to life. You mention that you had a hard time envisioning the Hab, until you saw the movie. I had the flip of that: I saw the movie before reading the book, so heard Matt Damon’s voice, and could remember scenes if I was having a hard time imagining. It actually bothered me a little, because I wanted to focus on the book! :)

      I appreciate your mention of other SF faves.



  4. Jill on August 26, 2017 at 11:40 am

    I find it interesting that the massive storm that sets up the whole story is one fact Weir got wrong, although he wouldn’t have known it at the time he wrote The Martian. But he captures the reader so quickly that, even with what we know now, I could easily suspend disbelief.



    • Elissa Field on August 26, 2017 at 11:59 am

      Jill, that’s interesting. I hadn’t heard that about the storm — but you raise a really good point. For any of us writing any kind of fiction where you’re either world building or creating environments vested with real facts, there’s the concern to populate rich detail, but also not a falsity flawed enough that it bumps the reader out of the dream, so to speak. You bring up a valid point that the goal is that, even if a detail is ‘off,’ the overall effect is authentic enough that the reader continues to suspend disbelief. Thanks for adding that to the discussion.



  5. Doug Brower on August 26, 2017 at 2:53 pm

    I read the book in a couple of sittings and enjoyed it thoroughly. The humor, cleverness and guts expressed by the hero carried the day.

    Like others, I was struck by the lack of backstory and the lack of a weepy girlfriend or stoic father back on Earth demanding news and holding NASA’s feet to the fire. It’s telling as well that the movie adaptation found no purpose for such characters to raise the stakes either. Contrast that decision with the film Apollo 13, another heroic space rescue movie, which found a very poignant roles for the astronauts’ wives.

    In Weir’s case, the decision not to give the hero a personal life works, because the story is all about Watney extricating himself through his wits and optimism. Any subplot involving Watney’s grieving boyfriend, say, would necessarily have distracted rather than added to the novel. Nevertheless, The Martian has to be the rare case where the book is better because the main character is restricted to being nearly two-dimensional.



    • Elissa Field on August 26, 2017 at 5:21 pm

      Doug, you expressed that so well. We had similar discussions in the dissection group: as much as anyone might feel curious about his personal life, we generally agreed in Weir’s choice that his desire for survival and meaningful scientific discovery should get the full attention.

      As you’re saying that the book is better for restraining that aspect of character, this is the kind of “gap” that we’ve found in other dissections — that, as much as certain elements generally lead to good writing, writers often know when restraint lets their story keep its focus.

      Thanks for commenting!



  6. David A. on August 26, 2017 at 5:49 pm

    I read it some time ago and was disappointed. For me, the main character grew annoying fairly quickly, and the heavy load of tech-speak became boring.



    • Elissa Field on August 27, 2017 at 6:38 pm

      Of course, that’s ok, too! We end up discussing what did not work for us, as well, in dissections — and we did have members who posted just this kind of response. Even when books are “breakouts,” they’re not for everyone. In some cases, it could even be a matter of asking, How on earth did this become such a hit? :)



  7. Roberta @It's a Mystery on August 26, 2017 at 10:12 pm

    I tried to keep up with the dissection of The Martian on FaceBook, but your summary is incredibly helpful. Thank you.

    Your assessment of whether Andy Weir should have included Watney’s inner thoughts/feelings is spot on. I struggle with that issue because I write thrillers and friends who prefer romantic suspense keep asking for more interior dialogue. On the other hand, if you think about it, Watney was keeping a journal (not speaking) and so his inner thoughts were what was being laid out for the reader.



    • Elissa Field on August 27, 2017 at 6:28 pm

      Roberta, I appreciate your comparison to other genres. Several of our dissection members who are frequent SF readers, especially hard science fiction, said the level of character development was not unusual for the genre. Similar to your comment, I was feeling a comparison to mystery/crime genres. Some do have deeply developed backstories, but not all. It’s so interesting to observe (and practice) what works best for each book.



  8. Karen Duvall on August 26, 2017 at 11:46 pm

    I don’t know how other writers deal with the internal story of their characters, but I don’t think it comes solely through inner thoughts and feelings. So much about the inner life of a character also comes through action and dialogue, as well as the perceptions of secondary characters, so that a multi-layered character is not ONLY revealed through internal dialogue. It’s more challenging to pull off, but the result is equally satisfying, and still serves to reveal the character on a deeper level. I’m sure we’ve all read books that are successful at this. I know I have.

    Subtext.



    • Elissa Field on August 27, 2017 at 6:31 pm

      Great observation, Karen! I was always inspired by Kazuo Ishiguro’s REMAINS OF THE DAY, as one of the most emotional stories despite the intense emotional restraint of the main characters. It is so inspiring to see this done.



  9. John J Kelley on August 27, 2017 at 8:07 am

    What a great discussion of the inner layers of a character and the decisions authors make on how much to reveal, and how to reveal them! A good example of how WU helps open my eyes on “authorly” topics ;)



  10. Robin Patchen on August 27, 2017 at 1:29 pm

    I’m one who never reads science fiction, and I don’t generally watch sci-fi movies, either. But I saw the movie, loved it, and then read the book. I was hooked on the book from the first page. Like others have said, it was Wadley’s humor and his unstoppable hope that kept me turning pages. I’ll read more from this author.

    I appreciated this post. I find it difficult to analyze a novel I loved, so this was great for me to step back and see it from different angles.



    • Elissa Field on August 27, 2017 at 6:34 pm

      You know, it’s funny what you say about it being difficult to analyze a novel. I wouldn’t have thought to sit down and write this evaluation of the novel — it really is a compilation of insights that came out in our discussion. I think many of us are surprised, as we respond to a handful of questions each day, at the layers of insight that the dissection discussions reveal! Thanks for reading and commenting!